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Calloused | [Short story]

23 Nov

I came upon a blog today by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields that contained a 100-words-or-less photo writing challenge – Friday Fictitioneers.

Below is my answer to the challenge based on the accompanying photo by C.E. Ayer.

ceayr-purple-door.jpg

Stone by stone he built his wall.

Around his heart.

Leaving a mistrusting, too-small doorway with a lock on it for second chances.

No one knocked for none had dared to trespass beyond the chain guard and padlocks.

Love crouched at the wall’s base, waiting, but was unable to grow forward, toward the gateway to his heart. Past the chain links of criticism, contempt, defensiveness, and stonewalling.

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28 responses to “Calloused | [Short story]

  1. lingeringvisions by Dawn

    11/29/2016 at 08:23

    Welcome to FF!
    Good story that so many of us can relate to!

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    • Surviving the Specter

      11/29/2016 at 08:24

      Thank you for taking your time to read it and for your encouraging words, my friend!

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      • lingeringvisions by Dawn

        11/29/2016 at 08:31

        It was an enjoyable read and I hope to find you again next (this) week. I would suggest using a personal photograph (even a caricature) like many of the other fictioneers do week after week in the linky. It’s much easier to find you that way.

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  2. Life Lessons of a Dog Lover

    11/26/2016 at 16:24

    Word by word you built my sympathy for your character. This a beautifully crafted piece.

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  3. Rowena

    11/25/2016 at 08:08

    I feel like giving your character a big hug although that would probably send him packing. Maybe just a smile. I hate to think of people suffering so much.
    xx Rowena

    Liked by 1 person

     
  4. neelwritesblog

    11/24/2016 at 10:07

    Powerful and unnerving. Welcome to the tribe.

    Liked by 1 person

     
  5. gahlearner

    11/24/2016 at 09:56

    Brilliant story, what a powerful first story for the challenge. Once upon a time I wandered into this group, too, and never left again. 🙂 Welcome.

    Liked by 1 person

     
  6. Dale

    11/23/2016 at 16:22

    That was a brilliant first story! And welcome to this fabulous group… Just thought I’d mention that our wonderful hostess is Rochelle and not Rachel… 😉

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    • rochellewisoff

      11/23/2016 at 16:41

      On the other hand, you spelled Wisoff correctly. 😉 That’s the one that people usually misspell.

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    • Surviving the Specter

      11/24/2016 at 14:13

      Thank you so much, Dale. I appreciate your encouraging words. p.s.-I corrected Rochelle’s name on my blog 😉 Thank you for the heads up, my friend. X

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  7. michael1148humphris

    11/23/2016 at 16:01

    I feel so sad for him, and wonder what drove him to this.

    Liked by 1 person

     
    • Surviving the Specter

      11/24/2016 at 14:14

      Thank you for your thoughts, michael’. It must have been a badly broken heart from a first love.

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  8. rochellewisoff

    11/23/2016 at 15:54

    Dear Chris,

    A hearty welcome to Friday Fictioneers. Powerful take on the prompt. I look forward to reading more from you. Dare I warn you that this exercise in brevity is highly addictive?

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  9. Iain Kelly

    11/23/2016 at 11:45

    Great take on the prompt, hope to see you back for more 🙂

    Liked by 1 person

     
  10. neilmacdon

    11/23/2016 at 11:09

    Welcome to Friday Fictioneers

    Liked by 1 person

     
  11. Sandra

    11/23/2016 at 11:03

    Excellent take on the prompt. It’s all in there. And welome!

    Liked by 1 person

     
  12. Claire Fuller

    11/23/2016 at 10:57

    Powerful stuff. Welcome to Friday Fictioneers!

    Liked by 1 person

     

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